Review: Talented (#1) by Sophie Davis

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Publisher: Indie Linked
Publishing Date: January 2014
ISBN: 9781618429940
Genre: Fantasy
Rating: 1.2/5.0

Publisher Description: If Sookie and 007 had a love child with a yearning for vengeance, her story would be TALENTED.

Review: Wow, Sookie huh? That should create of flood of readership. This reads more like if two retarded baboons had a manifestation of frenetic copulation their story would be TALENTED…. The cover art looks like a magicians assistant in a stage performance.

The first 30% of this novel is a lengthy backstory told within the bounds of LUV between Donavan and Talia. He is so ready for sex and she is teasing him beyond belief. She allows him to undress her to her undies and gets him all worked up only to back out. This is a constant theme throughout the novel. Talia is really Donavan’s step-sister who came to live with them when her parents were killed at a very young age. So its kind of creepy that they are kissing and fondling when in reality they should be repelled by those actions. The “It’s like kissing your sister” line.

So there were these underground nuclear reactors worldwide that melted down, no one could fix it then all of a sudden children were born with various abilities. No one can link any genetic mutation to the environmental crisis and trees are growing fur and dogs have feathers. So blah, blah, blah, and Talia’s’ parents are killed by rebels who hate Talents but Talia goes apeshit and kills Ten rebel operatives with her mind during a fit of rage/mourning. Why? Because she is oh so freakin’ speshul, that’s why. And don’t you forget it or Talia will telepathikinesis yur ass straight back to Texas/Nevada/Utah/Idaho/Arizona (all the bad states) for fucks sake. They have hormone addled teenagers performing deep covert ops to retrieve “information” from the coalition. Inter-twined within this non-existent story-line is this sordid love triangle.

Talia is a whiney, dick teasing asshat with the morals of a pigeon. She invokes love triangles amidst her burgeoning desires to screw anything male and hairy. Her failsafe response to everything are these mini-tantrums where indignant behavior is tantamount to righteousness. And then the coin lands on tails and we have clingy, whiney-baby Talia who wuvs her man and needs his stwong awrms awound her. Fug. There is this lengthy teen angst emotive spew page after page after page. Talia finds Donavan in the arms of some “blonde slut” bimbo. Well duh. What do you expect? But never fear, she has a backup plan that involves Mr. Turquoise eyes/ripply muscles Erik because she has never felt a kiss like that that has effected her so profoundly. Talia wastes no time teasing Erik by performing the same undie ritual as she did with Donavon.

The writing utilizes the tried and true overuse of certain words to help describe scenes and situations. About halfway through this disaster, I counted the word “Actually” 84 times as it was used pretty repetitively. Other words used consistently to the determinant of the novel were; “thankfully”, “gratefully”, “defensively”, “grudgingly” “mentally”, “grumbled”, “regretfully”, “carefully”, “scowl”, “pointedly”, “dryly”, “tentatively”, “mumbled x30” and “growled”.

Character development revolves around an extremely ego-centric and insecure main character. Rather than cheer for her, you end up loathing her actions that are based within the bounds of her little mind. There is no real giving of herself. Every decision she makes is predicated on what’s best for her. She seems to reflect the current state of consciousness in most people, so the author got that right at least. This novel needed to be edited way down in terms of dialogue and the story-line compressed. Talia needs to stand on her own as a tough operative in a world of espionage. She can be tough yet tender not clingy, whiney and self-absorbed. The men in her life should be minor interests for the sake of believability. This is slated to be an ongoing series. The author needs to consider getting professional editing services prior to publishing.

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